Thomas
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Thomas asked in Arts & HumanitiesPoetry · 7 years ago

Will you read and c.c. "Sailing on Wings".....metaphors, any meaning to you?

Thanks for reading this poem. Will reserve comments for "additional details." Your C.C. and comments are always welcomed and appreciated. Thomas

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Sailing on Wings

An eagle flies with her beautiful wings

Destination unknown, purpose she brings

Can he sail his ship through violent seas?

Gale force winds and a crew of unease

The eagle continues her flight with grace

Soaring high above thundering clouds in case

Sailing man gathers his men to inform

“Our boat is lost from this gathering storm”

The squall abates and the boat is salvaged

Save mast and sail heave tore and ravaged

Now lost at sea compass all but worthless

Commander and mates, may have felt birthless

High above windjammer swoops in eagle

She startles crew, but not the proud regal

“Follow me” conveys the female bird

Commander looks up and says “that’s absurd”

Hours go by and the boat still flounders

Aquila flying near leaving sounders

The ships men now consider mutiny

“Follow that eagle will live don’t you see”

At that, the master, finally broken

Looked up, Aquila, flying soft spoken

“She can lead us safely to find our land

Like sailing on wings time to understand”

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Author's Note

Aquila is a type of Eagle. For the purposes of this poem.

it is a female eagle, of which the commander of the ship

was able to identify.

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Update:

Hi everyone: thank you for the answers so far. What an honor you guys....feel blessed. I am realizing I need to learn to employ the use of commas more often mid-sentence to maintain a better flow...found a few areas I should have done so. Will not note it here. Any one is welcome to point it out again though. I did find one mis-used word....in S7 L4, should be "Follow that eagle we'll (not will) live don't you see." Some have nailed the metaphor, and not only admitting one needs help, but here a man understanding his woman, listening, and letting them help you. Thomas

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Update 2:

I am closing this now. Thanks to all who answered this poem. Same to the sweet people who give the poem a star. Peace. Thomas

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  • Anonymous
    7 years ago
    Best answer

    Many misfortunes, makes one humble..

    Too much pride to accept help..

    When all seems lost, that's the time when we just think "oh, what the heck.. we've got nothing to lose, so we might as well just give it a try"..

    It teaches us that nothing was truly lost to begin with.. it just takes calmness.. one should collect his/her thoughts and don't be too stubborn to accept guidance from above ;) yes.. miracles do happen.. you just have to have faith..

    It was a nice poem.. I enjoyed it.. :)

  • Lorry
    Lv 4
    7 years ago

    "Sailing on Wings".... I cannot help but think that the message for me.. or at least what I read into this beautiful piece of poetry.. is... When all seems lost.. follow your heart (bird) to find your "home".. If you search within your heart, no raging storm can keep you lost forever.

    There have been times I have felt that I can no longer weather the storm, perhaps of a different kind from which you write, but nevertheless.. I follow the beautiful bird within and "Sail upon my own wings"

    Beautiful ((((Bri)))) (-:

  • 7 years ago

    Without a doubt, The Eagle has landed with this poem.

    You are certainly an interesting writer Thomas...

  • 7 years ago

    It's beautiful, commas notwithstanding or grammar overall.

    An eagle has to land somewhere...but where is it's home in this work?

    All water, one bird, one ship...or does it live high above on the mizzen?

    Thankee kindly!

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  • Anonymous
    7 years ago

    I really enjoy this.

    I think usually, I would relate the eagle to God, or Jesus.

    But this time, it seems more like a follower of Christ that is asking to be used by God.

    She doesn't know it, but she's leading people to the truth.

    And she's saving people, although she feels hopeless herself at times.

    She doesn't know how beautiful she really is.

    She's a leader of Christians.

    Just my thoughts.

    I love how this leaves a sense of mystery.

    I think it's because of the layout.

    Great job.

    Write on!!

  • 7 years ago

    I would call this poem 'The Calm After the Storm'.

  • Anonymous
    7 years ago

    Reminds me of Jason and the Argonauts Thomas and, its made me fill sea sick. I enjoyed reading it though.

  • 7 years ago

    Made me think of this song http://youtu.be/Bpbuqh12oj4

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    Good write Bri

  • 7 years ago

    Different and not at all cliche, quite inspiring really!

  • Anonymous
    7 years ago

    don't look a gift bird in the mouth

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