Kaela asked in Arts & HumanitiesPoetry · 2 months ago

What do you think of these haiku poems?

The youth is gone now

Wrinkles sip milk and honey

Greedy graves grab bones.

I can dream of you

Whispers are like a mouth’s tears

Must your kiss haunt me?

A tree stands alone

In a yard without children

No flowers blossom.

The moon holds the world

Stars wink back like an old man

Our fates are too short.

Man and woman sit

On an hourglass hissing

Must dust fill us all?

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  • 1 month ago

    I really like these

    I think you have the makings

    Of a great poet

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  • 1 month ago

    Since I do not like Haikus.

    I say it's fair.

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  • 1 month ago

    A powerful collection of barnyard poetry. I especially like the line about chickens.

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  • 1 month ago

    They're really good, holding to

    their

    tradition of form.

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  • 2 months ago

    Some nice lines but it's time to grow beyond the syllable count that often ruins a nice image.  Here's something you can read to help you sharpen your Haiku.

    https://hubpages.com/literature/True-Haiku-Myth-5-...

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  • Anonymous
    2 months ago

    I prefer poems about people that are from Nantucket.

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  • 2 months ago

    They are cool.......

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